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zone industrielle
vite avant les tondeuses
les couleurs du printemps

industrial park
quick before lawn mowers
the colors of spring


Zoe Weatherwax,
cco 2017-04-1

Commentaire.

Haïku sur la fragilité des choses et, en filigrane, l'urgence de vivre. A noter l'opposition forte entre L1 et L3, entre le matérialisme, le dur, l'artificiel et la nature, la vie, les couleurs. Il y a aussi une dynamique à l'oeuvre, on voit progresser la tondeuse, l'après (deviné) précède l'avant (fleurs). Construction rare qui met l'essentiel à la fin afin de lui donner plus de résonance.

Keywords

flower couleur

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* zoom - Zoom of the discourse.
The three segments of haiku are organized with images that are closer and closer as a zoom effect.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* avis - Opinion given by the author.
The author tells his/her views or an explanation. The speech is not neutral at the first level of reading/writing. This is not a haiku where the author explains to the reader what he or she should understand, usually completed and of no interest. Here, the author gives an indication that is part of the elements of the discourse in addition to the others and that is not a redundancy (redundancy, precision, explanation).

* soudain - Sudden modification.
The haiku describes a sudden, sometimes unexpected event. He grabs something that just happened. It appears as a transition between two states: before and after.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Chute - The Fall,the Decline,to die,to grow old.

Tout ce qui est considéré comme une diminution de l'état, une perte de niveau, généralement suite au cours du Temps. Le déclin des êtres ou des choses.

Instanciations
- La maison abandonnée, la vieillesse, la maladie.
- L'approche de la mort, de la fin.
- La dégradation des lieux, des objets.
- Le déclin.
- Parfois toute situation sabi portant la trace des années sur un objet.

Type : Etat

Structure : Sujet + Verbe + Etat

Sujet := Toute chose
Verbe := être / devenir
Etat := abandonné / inutile / dégradé /diminué

* A_Mort - Death.

Contexte de mort (deuil, décès, cimetière...) ou pulsion de mort (guerre, violence...).

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