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autumn chill . . .
the distant whistle
of the evening train

froid de l'automne . . .
au loin le coup de sifflet
du train du soir


Carol Raisfeld, USA
cco 2017-04-1

Commentaire.

Haïku sur le motif du son d'un trafic à longue distance dans la nuit. Ici, c'est le train qui évoque le voyage, un archetype fort. J'ai remarqué que la nuit est souvent froide. Peut-être est-ce seulement par que les sons portent plus loin à cause de l'inversion thermique.

Keywords

autumn cold sound evening train

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma :
  Motif : mmm087 -

Used techniques :

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* soudain - Sudden modification.
The haiku describes a sudden, sometimes unexpected event. He grabs something that just happened. It appears as a transition between two states: before and after.

* meteo - Meteo used to create an atmosphere.
Use in a haiku segment of a reference to the weather (weather conditions) that provides more than just the mention of the weather as a background. The reference refers to a state of weather that has physical (cold rain, sudden hail, frost,...) or psychological (overcast sky, storm warning, sultry afternoon...) effects. These effects are mainly felt through the skin (contact, temperature,...); which connects the author/reader to the World (his direct environment).

The mentioned weather and its effects share a set of semes (brutality, unpredictability, "cold", psychologically oppressive climate,...) with the situation experienced by the author.

A sudden and unpleasant change of situation shares semes (brutality, unpredictability, impact) with a sudden storm, hail, cold rain. A hard time to live, a disappointment, with a cold rain. An overcast weather before the rain shares with a moment when we fear the occurrence of events that we fear.

Although the meteo is often used as a marker (kigo - word of season), it sometimes brings more than just the place in the season or the context of the moment.

* - Meteo used to create an atmosphere.
Use in a haiku segment of a reference to the weather (weather conditions) that provides more than just the mention of the weather as a background. The reference refers to a state of weather that has physical (cold rain, sudden hail, frost,...) or psychological (overcast sky, storm warning, sultry afternoon...) effects. These effects are mainly felt through the skin (contact, temperature,...); which connects the author/reader to the World (his direct environment).

The mentioned weather and its effects share a set of semes (brutality, unpredictability, "cold", psychologically oppressive climate,...) with the situation experienced by the author.

A sudden and unpleasant change of situation shares semes (brutality, unpredictability, impact) with a sudden storm, hail, cold rain. A hard time to live, a disappointment, with a cold rain. An overcast weather before the rain shares with a moment when we fear the occurrence of events that we fear.

Although the meteo is often used as a marker (kigo - word of season), it sometimes brings more than just the place in the season or the context of the moment.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Voyage - The Travel.

Le voyage, la migration... Lié à la Route qui elle est plus en potentialités que le Voyage qui est action.

* A_Nuit - The Night.

La nuit primale, avec son obscurité, ses "dangers", ses mystères et nos peurs millénaires.

* A_PointActif - Active point (color, sound, ...)

Variante de la Couleur. Ici, c'est un point, généralement de couleur qui a le rôle important. En fait, cet archétype illustre le fait que c'est l'Inconscient qui analyse les images de notre regard. C'est lui qui repère ces points et y dirige notre regard.

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