Analysis of the Haiku structure
spring heat -
the imprint of grass
in her thighs
chaleur de printemps -
la marque des herbes
sur ses cuisses
Paul Chambers, UK
Haïku basé sur l'allusion et le non-dit. A remarquer aussi le double sens en L1 qui définit le contexte. Finement écrit, un haïku intime et pudique, en apparence. Il apparait un peu comme une confidence entre l'auteur et le lecteur.
love erotic warmth
Structure of this haiku.
Used techniques :
* absence -
At the level: -
Description level: -
* jeu_mots - Puns.
A pun, a double meaning word without being a pivot. This is often an occasion for a multi-level reading discourse with double meaning words. This device is linked to humour, to the comic of the situation.
Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects
At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.
Description level: 5-vecu - Personal(Experienced, psycho, acquired...)
* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.
These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.
We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.
The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.
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Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.
At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.
Description level: 2-trait - Style,subject handling
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