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Analysis of the Haiku structure

summer evening
from the tall grass
the slow rise of fireflies

soir d'été
des hautes herbes
la lente montée des lucioles


Linty,
cco 2017-04-2

Commentaire.

Haïku magique porté par les archétypes opposés de la Nuit et de la Lumière. A remarquer : la longueur des lignes augmente, plus on avance, mimant le nombre de lucioles. Et cette fois, j'ai pu conserver cet effet dans la traduction.

Keywords

evening summer light firefly grass

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Lumière - The Light.

La Lumière.
A mettre en relation avec la Lumière dans la Nuit.

* A_PointActif - Active point (color, sound, ...)

Variante de la Couleur. Ici, c'est un point, généralement de couleur qui a le rôle important. En fait, cet archétype illustre le fait que c'est l'Inconscient qui analyse les images de notre regard. C'est lui qui repère ces points et y dirige notre regard.

* A_Nuit - The Night.

La nuit primale, avec son obscurité, ses "dangers", ses mystères et nos peurs millénaires.

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