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Le jardin oublié
quelques lupins debouts
en rébellion


Ruth Nicaise, Belgique
cco 2017-05-1

Commentaire.

Un schéma assez fréquent. La Vie qui triomphe de l'adversité. C'est souvent le jardin qui essaie de sauver la maison abandonnée. Ici, c'est le jardin qui est abandonné. La Vie s'est repliée sur un dernier carré qui reste debout dans la Chute générale. J'aime bien ce terme de rebellion. Il me fait penser à un texte de Julos Beaucarne à la fin des années 70.

Keywords

garden flower

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma :
  Motif : mmm070 -

Used techniques :

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* avis - Opinion given by the author.
The author tells his/her views or an explanation. The speech is not neutral at the first level of reading/writing. This is not a haiku where the author explains to the reader what he or she should understand, usually completed and of no interest. Here, the author gives an indication that is part of the elements of the discourse in addition to the others and that is not a redundancy (redundancy, precision, explanation).

* perso - Personification.
Personification. Projection of human feelings or behaviours on things or animals.

* detail - A detail is the key element of the haiku.
The strength of these haikus lies in a detail, either in its relationship to other elements or images, or in its own strength. It plays the active role and will be remembered.

We can recognize there the action of the archetype of the ActivePoint.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Vie - Life.

Toute manifestation d'un être pour affirmer sa présence, sa survie, parfois dans un contexte qui lui est défavorable.

* A_Chute - The Fall,the Decline,to die,to grow old.

Tout ce qui est considéré comme une diminution de l'état, une perte de niveau, généralement suite au cours du Temps. Le déclin des êtres ou des choses.

Instanciations
- La maison abandonnée, la vieillesse, la maladie.
- L'approche de la mort, de la fin.
- La dégradation des lieux, des objets.
- Le déclin.
- Parfois toute situation sabi portant la trace des années sur un objet.

Type : Etat

Structure : Sujet + Verbe + Etat

Sujet := Toute chose
Verbe := être / devenir
Etat := abandonné / inutile / dégradé /diminué

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