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sound of a moth
trapped in a paper lantern
summer rain

le bruit d'une phalène
prise dans une lanterne de papier
pluie d'été


Margaret Chula, USA
cco 2017-05-2

Commentaire.

Haïku basé sur les oppositions : la Vie versus la Mort (par la flamme), l'Intérieur versus l'Extérieur, la chaleur versus le froid de la pluie, le Feu versus l'Eau. Les similitudes, de la fragilité (archetype) de la flamme et de phalène. Les archétypes de la Lumière, de la Mort, de la Vie dominent le discours. Mais il y a cependant un trait spécial sous-jacent : on est juste avant. Avant la mort de l'insecte. Le discours s'arrête juste avant, laissant le lecteur imaginer. Cette technique rare est très efficace pour cérer de la résonnance au haïku.

Keywords

butterfly death candle light sound

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* avant - Just before.
We're just before something happens. The haiku notes the moment before the situation changes from one state to another. Like, for example, just before the rain.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Vie - Life.

Toute manifestation d'un être pour affirmer sa présence, sa survie, parfois dans un contexte qui lui est défavorable.

* A_Mort - Death.

Contexte de mort (deuil, décès, cimetière...) ou pulsion de mort (guerre, violence...).

* A_Piège - The Trap.

* D_IntExt - In <> Out.

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