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Analysis of the Haiku structure

lune de miel -
sur les draps blancs notre désir
écarlate


Ben Coudert, France
cco 2017-07-1

Commentaire.

Economie de moyens. Efficacité du discours qui change de cours avec l'élément final. Le rouge avec toute la richesse de ses significations. Et le choix du mot, et de ses sonorités dures.

Keywords

love red color

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* absence - The main element is not explicit.
The haiku is structured around an unnamed element to which each image refers. The interest is to save the space that would be used by naming the element while having the effect it produces.

The haiku can appear as a vault from which the scaffolding has been removed. If the haiku is well composed, the main element is absent but everything refers to it.

This technique delays storage in memory because the reader must complete the discourse with the unnamed element so that the haiku is unambiguously understandable. It then acquires a higher memory weight.

* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

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