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Analysis of the Haiku structure

montée de lait
de plus en plus lourds
les nuages


Coralie Berhault Creuzet , France
cco 2017-07-1

Commentaire.

J'aime bien ce jeu de similitudes basées sur le blanc et les formes arrondies, la montée du lait et des nuages. C'est en fait une opposition-similitude car elle oppose aussi le Haut versus le Bas, le Grand versus le Petit. Mais c'est L3 qui donne sa force au haïku, car on aurait attendu autre chose. La substitution du sujet est ici une technique efficace et qui de plus donne une note amusante au haïku.

Keywords

white cloud humour

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* opp-sim - Opposition-similarity.
Opposition AND similarity. A relationship between two terms is both an opposition and a similarity.

For example: an egg on the plate and the setting sun. There is a sharing of the semes of roundness, red, but opposition between Up versus Bottom, Large versus Small.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

Archetypes and dialectics

* D_HautBas - Up <> Down.

Une opposition entre ce qui est en Haut et ce qui est en Bas. Par exemple, le ciel et la terre, les étoiles et les lumières de la ville, les nuages et la mer...

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