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Analysis of the Haiku structure

pouring more coffee
into the cup—
rain on the bayou

reverser du café
dans la tasse—
pluie sur le bayou


sage stone, USA
cco 2017-06-1

Commentaire.

Haiku meteo avec une opposition Intérieur versus Extérieur. Opposition aussi entre le temps extérieur (pluie continue) et le temps intérieur cyclique (reverser). Il ne doit pas faire froid sinon l'auteure aurait ajouté du sucre.

Keywords

coffee rain

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma : sss024 Cold weather and hot food.
  Motif : mmm040 - Sky / beverage.

Used techniques :


* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* S21 - Caesura between L2 and L3.
Caesura between L2 and L3.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

Effects: liasen - Binding with sensorial feelings.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content

Archetypes and dialectics

* D_IntExt - In <> Out.


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