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bouquet de roses~
sur sa robe blanche
quelques gouttes de vin


Sarra Masmoudi, Tunisie
cco 2017-07-2

Commentaire.

Il y a quelque chose de spécial dans ce haïku. Ce doit être du à la résonnance entre le rouge du vin et le dessin des fleurs. Mais il y a pour moi aussi une résonnance entre ces taches et celles d'une défloration, peut-être due au lien entre virginité et la blancheur de la robe.

Keywords

flower white red color stain clothes roses robe wine

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :


* jeu_mots - Puns.
A pun, a double meaning word without being a pivot. This is often an occasion for a multi-level reading discourse with double meaning words. This device is linked to humour, to the comic of the situation.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-vecu - Personal(Experienced, psycho, acquired...)


* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

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Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-trait - Style,subject handling


* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 6-inf - Active infrastructure (archetypes, dialectics)


* allusion - Allusion to something known by the reader.
This technique refers to something that is supposed to be known to the reader. This type of haiku only works for the reader who understands the allusion. It is often a cultural element or an environment shared between the author and the reader. The reference adds a note of complicity in the speech.

ex: Liberty Market: a chain of stores in the USA.

It can also be illustrated in jargon (specialized languages shared by a community).

Effects: resmem - Resonance in memory.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_PointActif - Active point (color, sound, ...)

Variante de la Couleur. Ici, c'est un point, généralement de couleur qui a le rôle important. En fait, cet archétype illustre le fait que c'est l'Inconscient qui analyse les images de notre regard. C'est lui qui repère ces points et y dirige notre regard.

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