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averse de juillet~
quelques gouttes d'eau de fleurs d'oranger
dans mon café


Sarra Masmoudi, Tunisie
cco 2017-07-2

Commentaire.

Ce n'est pas un haïku météo car il ne se sert pas du temps pour illustrer l'atmosphère. Ici, c'est plutôt une atmosphère composée d'odeurs et de sensations. A noter l'opposition entre la légèreté de la fleur d'oranger et le fort du café. On est aussi étonné par le café alors qu'on aurait attendu le thé...

Keywords

rain scent coffee

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* multisens - Synestesia - Multi-senses perception.
Haïkus using effects on several senses (hearing, touch, taste, vision, smell). They play on the phenomenon of resonance between feelings (Synesthesia). This device usually produces strong haikus because they are physical.

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

* surprise - Unexpected element.
An element of haiku is unexpected. In view of the speech, we would have thought of one element and it is another that creates a surprise effect.

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