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Analysis of the Haiku structure

auto fermée
l’arôme du café
s’étale


Marlène Alexa, Egypte
cco 2017-07-2

Commentaire.

Haïku d'atmosphère et de juxtaposition. Sa force provient de deux éléments. L'originalité de juxtaposition entre L1 et L2. Le dynamisme de L3. Au lieu de mentionner simplement l'odeur, l'auteure lui donne du mouvement. Ce mouvement est lent, il augmente dans notre perception la durée du haïku. Celui-ci se prolonge donc, non pas par une résonnance comme on le voit presque toujours mais par la simple continuïté, expansion, d'un de ses éléments. Effet rare.

Keywords

scent coffee car

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* progression - Advance.
Structure with a spatial or time oriented advance.

* juxtaposition - Juxtaposition.
Use of images placed side by side to create an effect superior to that of each separate image. It is not a resonance effect as in similarity but rather a composition effect as in a painting or still life.

As the juxtaposed images have no or very few common semes, they compose a new global image in relation to its components.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* poesie - Use of poetical devices.
Use of poetical devices.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Abri - The shelter, the refuge, the greenhouse, the home.

Tout endroit de vie où on est abrité des conditions extérieures. La maison, la serre... En relation avec les dialectiques intérieur versus Extérieur, Chaud versus Froid. Souvent lié aux haïkus météo.

A distinguer du lieu Clos qui possède moins de sèmes. Au chaud dans une maison alors qu'il pleut dehors relève de l'Abri plus que lieu Clos.

* T_Lent - Slow Time.

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