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bal des pompiers
elle a ressorti sa robe
d’avant les enfants

Philippe Macé, France
cco 2017-07-2


Haïku d'atmosphère avec un charme désuet et attachant. En regardant de plus près, ce haïku a une composition étrange qui en fait un objet à remonter le temps. C'est assez rare de voir cet effet aussi réussi. Il me semble provenir de la juxtaposition des trois éléments de nostalgie. Celle d'un temps différent. C'est aussi ce que j'appelle un discours feuilleté. Il y a le discours de surface (ce que l'on voit) et le discours profond (l'impression laissée et le non explicite). Chapeau !


woman clothes love couple robe feast couple

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* sabi - Sabi
The sabi is a concept of Japanese aesthetics, derived from Zen Buddhist concepts, linked to the feeling created by the alteration by time, the decrepitude of aging things, the patina of objects, the mark of Time. The charm of things that have lived (Vintage des Américains).

Are sabi: Used steps from an old staircase, worn clothing, a rusty railing, a patinated knob...

In connection with Sabi-wabi.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Retour - Coming back.

Le retour à la maison, au passé, revenir sur ses pas, retrouver ce que l'on a quitté.

* T_Cycle - Cyclical Time.

* T_PassePresent - Bubble of Past.

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