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Analysis of the Haiku structure

lightning --
her nightgown
comes off

éclair d'orage --
sa robe de nuit
tombe


Paul David Mena, USA
cco 2017-08-1

Commentaire.

Un haïku d'atmosphère. Le motif de l'éclair est classique et porteur de signfications. On le retrouve sous une autre forme dans la fameuse scène de Basic Instinct. Ici, le discours est ambigü. Pourquoi l'orage ? Puissance de la sensation ? surprise ? A remarquer le grande efficacité de l'écriture de Paul David Mena qui d'un simple détail crée toute une atmosphère.

Keywords

erotic woman thunderstorm lightning habits robe

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* soudain - Sudden modification.
The haiku describes a sudden, sometimes unexpected event. He grabs something that just happened. It appears as a transition between two states: before and after.

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* opp-sim - Opposition-similarity.
Opposition AND similarity. A relationship between two terms is both an opposition and a similarity.

For example: an egg on the plate and the setting sun. There is a sharing of the semes of roundness, red, but opposition between Up versus Bottom, Large versus Small.

Archetypes and dialectics

* D_HautBas - Up <> Down.

Une opposition entre ce qui est en Haut et ce qui est en Bas. Par exemple, le ciel et la terre, les étoiles et les lumières de la ville, les nuages et la mer...

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