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Analysis of the Haiku structure

fin du jour
sur la terrasse une tasse
reste encore un peu


Gérard Dumon, France
cco 2017-08-1

Commentaire.

Il y a comme une personnification dans ce haïku mais pas entièrement. Si elle existe, elle est dans notre reconstruction de la situation. Si la tasse reste, c'est que l'auteur y reste aussi. Ce n'est pas dit explicitement mais au travers d'un détail. De nouveau, efficacité du discours pour un haïku d'atmosphère où les archétypes de la Nuit qui vient et de la Lumière qui s'en va jouent à plein.

Keywords

evening warmth cup summer sidewalk_cafe

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma : sss001 Overcoming Life.
  Motif : mmm064 - Detail that outlives.

Schéma : sss021 Life in the distance.
  Motif : mmm077 - Still a little light.
L'auteur a noté qu'il reste un peu de lumière dans un moment où l'obscurité l'emporte. C'est souvent lié à la fin du jour. La Lumière semble s'être réfugiée là avant de disparaître complètement. Ce peu de lumière peut être relié à la Vie qui résiste face à l'obscurité.

Used techniques :


* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

Effects: liasen - Binding with sensorial feelings.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content


* perso - Personification.
Personification. Projection of human feelings or behaviours on things or animals.

Effects: liavec - Binding to the reader's experience.


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-vecu - Personal(Experienced, psycho, acquired...)


* avis - Opinion given by the author.
The author tells his/her views or an explanation. The speech is not neutral at the first level of reading/writing. This is not a haiku where the author explains to the reader what he or she should understand, usually completed and of no interest. Here, the author gives an indication that is part of the elements of the discourse in addition to the others and that is not a redundancy (redundancy, precision, explanation).

Effects: liavec - Binding to the reader's experience.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-aut - Author's role


* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 6-inf - Active infrastructure (archetypes, dialectics)

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Nuit - The Night.

La nuit primale, avec son obscurité, ses "dangers", ses mystères et nos peurs millénaires.

* A_Lumière - The Light.

La Lumière.
A mettre en relation avec la Lumière dans la Nuit.

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