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Perseids . . .
soft thuds here and there
in the orchard

Perseïdes . . .
des chutes sourdes çà et là
dans le verger


Julie Warther, USA
cco 2017-08-2

Commentaire.

J'aime ce haïku étrange. La chute des étoiles est en similitude avec celle des pommes du verger. Il faut remarquer que le fait est évoqué au travers du son. Il fait noir, on ne voit rien. La chute des fruits (visuelle) est remplacée par un son. Un effet rare souligné par les sonorités sourdes en anglais. A remarquer aussi l'opposition entre Lumière et Obscurité, silence des étoiles et bruits au sol.

Keywords

star fruit sound night orchard

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* xxx - Undefined appeal.
Haïku having something undefinable that deserves further study.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* opp-sim - Opposition-similarity.
Opposition AND similarity. A relationship between two terms is both an opposition and a similarity.

For example: an egg on the plate and the setting sun. There is a sharing of the semes of roundness, red, but opposition between Up versus Bottom, Large versus Small.

* multisens - Synestesia - Multi-senses perception.
Haïkus using effects on several senses (hearing, touch, taste, vision, smell). They play on the phenomenon of resonance between feelings (Synesthesia). This device usually produces strong haikus because they are physical.

* - Synestesia - Multi-senses perception.
Haïkus using effects on several senses (hearing, touch, taste, vision, smell). They play on the phenomenon of resonance between feelings (Synesthesia). This device usually produces strong haikus because they are physical.

Archetypes and dialectics

* D_HautBas - Up <> Down.

Une opposition entre ce qui est en Haut et ce qui est en Bas. Par exemple, le ciel et la terre, les étoiles et les lumières de la ville, les nuages et la mer...

* D_GrandPetit - Big <> Little.

* T_Lent - Slow Time.

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