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autumn deepens—
a fish slides down
the cormorant’s throat

l'automne avance —
un poisson glisse
dans la gorge du cormoran


Ferris Gilli, USA
cco 2017-09-1

Commentaire.

Un haïku sur le schéma du soudain. Il s'agit d'un fait entrevu, juste un instant. Ici, cependant, c'est instant s'insère dans un mouvement plus lent, celui de l'automne qui avance. Une opposition étrange entre l'épéhmère et le lent, voire le cyclique (saison) C'est aussi une atmosphère de mort, de fin (saison, poisson) basée sur la résonnance entre les deux faits. Seul le cormoran s'en tire heureux.

Keywords

autumn fish bird cormorant

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* soudain - Sudden modification.
The haiku describes a sudden, sometimes unexpected event. He grabs something that just happened. It appears as a transition between two states: before and after.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* meteo - Meteo used to create an atmosphere.
Use in a haiku segment of a reference to the weather (weather conditions) that provides more than just the mention of the weather as a background. The reference refers to a state of weather that has physical (cold rain, sudden hail, frost,...) or psychological (overcast sky, storm warning, sultry afternoon...) effects. These effects are mainly felt through the skin (contact, temperature,...); which connects the author/reader to the World (his direct environment).

The mentioned weather and its effects share a set of semes (brutality, unpredictability, "cold", psychologically oppressive climate,...) with the situation experienced by the author.

A sudden and unpleasant change of situation shares semes (brutality, unpredictability, impact) with a sudden storm, hail, cold rain. A hard time to live, a disappointment, with a cold rain. An overcast weather before the rain shares with a moment when we fear the occurrence of events that we fear.

Although the meteo is often used as a marker (kigo - word of season), it sometimes brings more than just the place in the season or the context of the moment.

Archetypes and dialectics

* T_Lent - Slow Time.

* A_Passage - The Crossing, the Transition.

Tout ce qui est le passage d'une étape, d'une borne, d'un état à l'autre. Le franchissement d'un col, le passage d'une barrière séparant deux zones. Les ponts, solstices, nouvel-an...

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