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Analysis of the Haiku structure

her name on the marble;
birth and death,
the space between

son nom sur le marbre;
naissance et mort
l'espace entre


Brian Austin Darnell, USA
cco 2017-09-1

Commentaire.

Efficacité du discours qui dit une vie entre deux mots. Le marbre, par sa froideur et sa dureté, contribue à glacer l'atmosphère. A noter que la force de ce haïku se révèle juste à la fin, ce qui lui donne de la résonance.

Keywords

cemetery grave cold

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* S3 - Three elements haiku.
Three independent elements compose the haiku. Also known as the grocery list.

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Chute - The Fall,the Decline,to die,to grow old.

Tout ce qui est considéré comme une diminution de l'état, une perte de niveau, généralement suite au cours du Temps. Le déclin des êtres ou des choses.

Instanciations
- La maison abandonnée, la vieillesse, la maladie.
- L'approche de la mort, de la fin.
- La dégradation des lieux, des objets.
- Le déclin.
- Parfois toute situation sabi portant la trace des années sur un objet.

Type : Etat

Structure : Sujet + Verbe + Etat

Sujet := Toute chose
Verbe := être / devenir
Etat := abandonné / inutile / dégradé /diminué

* T_Cycle - Cyclical Time.

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