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Analysis of the Haiku structure

gibbous moon—
the swelling egg sac
of a wolf spider

lune gibbeuse—
le sac gonflé d'oeufs
d'une araignée-loup


sage stone, USA
cco 2017-10-1

Commentaire.

Haïku d'atmosphère un peu lourde et angoissante. Similitude entre la Lune et le sac d'oeuf. Oppositions Haut versus Bas, Grand versus Petit. Le haïku reste ouvert à la fin. On ne sait pas quelle est la réaction de l'auteure. Cela ajoute une incertitude qui augmente le temps de rangement en mémoire et lui donne de la résonnance. Ce haïku est tire aussi son activité de l'archetype de la Rencontre.

Keywords

moon spider

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* xxx - Undefined appeal.
Haïku having something undefinable that deserves further study.

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* yugen - Yugen.
Yugen is a concept of Japanese aesthetics that can be expressed as deep, mysterious, dark, troubled.... In criticism of Japanese poetry, he expresses a subtle depth of things that are vaguely evoked in the poem.

* - Yugen.
Yugen is a concept of Japanese aesthetics that can be expressed as deep, mysterious, dark, troubled.... In criticism of Japanese poetry, he expresses a subtle depth of things that are vaguely evoked in the poem.

Archetypes and dialectics

* D_HautBas - Up <> Down.

Une opposition entre ce qui est en Haut et ce qui est en Bas. Par exemple, le ciel et la terre, les étoiles et les lumières de la ville, les nuages et la mer...

* D_GrandPetit - Big <> Little.

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