tempslibres - free times haiku database

Analysis of the Haiku structure

autumn evening -
the silence
of ripe pears

soir d'automne -
le silence
des poires mûres


Brian Austin Darnell, USA
cco 2017-10-2

Commentaire.

Un haïku de sonorités sourdes, ce qui est très rare. On écrit souvent sur des sons marquants, aigûs ou forts mais pas bas et sourds. Et de plus, ici, le son n'existe que dans l'imagination du lecteur. Il est supposé arriver lorsque la poire va tomber dans le noir. Une figure très rare.

Keywords

evening silence autumn fruit

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma :
  Motif : mmm090 -

Used techniques :

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

Translated with www.DeepL.com/Translator

* poesie - Use of poetical devices.
Use of poetical devices.

* xxx - Undefined appeal.
Haïku having something undefinable that deserves further study.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Chute - The Fall,the Decline,to die,to grow old.

Tout ce qui est considéré comme une diminution de l'état, une perte de niveau, généralement suite au cours du Temps. Le déclin des êtres ou des choses.

Instanciations
- La maison abandonnée, la vieillesse, la maladie.
- L'approche de la mort, de la fin.
- La dégradation des lieux, des objets.
- Le déclin.
- Parfois toute situation sabi portant la trace des années sur un objet.

Type : Etat

Structure : Sujet + Verbe + Etat

Sujet := Toute chose
Verbe := être / devenir
Etat := abandonné / inutile / dégradé /diminué

* T_Immobile - Frozen Time.

All the author's haikus >>>