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lune croissante~
la voisine de nouveau
enceinte


Sarra Masmoudi, Tunisie
cco 2017-10-2

Commentaire.

Vieux motif reliant la grossesse à la Lune croissante, au travers de la similitude des cycles et pour la grossesse, celle de la rondeur. J'aime bien la manière dont est traitée l'information, un peu comme une remarque incidente. Cela lui donne de la résonance en nous, comme pour une nouvelle que nous aurions apprise. Il y a cependant un peu de désolation avec ces grossesses qui reviennent (comme la lune) et qui semblent plus subies que désirées.

Keywords

moon neighbor pregnant

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma : sss040 Me and the World.
  Motif : mmm099 - Woman, cat, moon.

Used techniques :


* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)


* avis - Opinion given by the author.
The author tells his/her views or an explanation. The speech is not neutral at the first level of reading/writing. This is not a haiku where the author explains to the reader what he or she should understand, usually completed and of no interest. Here, the author gives an indication that is part of the elements of the discourse in addition to the others and that is not a redundancy (redundancy, precision, explanation).

Effects: liavec - Binding to the reader's experience.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-aut - Author's role


* ellipse - Ellipsis.
Ellipsis: Only the minimum is said but the whole situation can be reconstruct by the reader.
This is also the case when only a part of the discourse is present. The remaining part can be guessed by the reader.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures

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