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Analysis of the Haiku structure

the last dance -
her cheap perfume
don't matter

dernière danse -
son parfum bon marché
n'importe plus


Carol Raisfeld, USA
cco 2017-10-2

Commentaire.

Haïku d'atmosphère. Tout est dit en peu de mots. C'est une spécialité de Craol de nous écrire des haïkus à plusieurs lectures possibles. Il y a en effet du grinçant au delà de l'humour de surface.

Keywords

couple humour scent perfume

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* avis - Opinion given by the author.
The author tells his/her views or an explanation. The speech is not neutral at the first level of reading/writing. This is not a haiku where the author explains to the reader what he or she should understand, usually completed and of no interest. Here, the author gives an indication that is part of the elements of the discourse in addition to the others and that is not a redundancy (redundancy, precision, explanation).

* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

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Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Rencontre - The Unexpected Encounter.

La rencontre fortuite entre deux êtres avec un moment où quelque chose se passe entre eux.

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