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lune du givre
l'arôme du café
remplit le silence


Gérard Dumon, France
cco 2017-11-1

Commentaire.

Haïku meteo-cuisine classique. Opposition entre une chaleur du café à l'Intérieur et le froid de l'Extérieur. La subtilité est que l'on aborde pas directement cette opposition mais qu'elle est visible par de détail périphérique, l'arôme du café qui ne peut être que chaud.

Keywords

moon cold frost coffee smell silence

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma :
  Motif : mmm003 -

Used techniques :

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* meteo - Meteo used to create an atmosphere.
Use in a haiku segment of a reference to the weather (weather conditions) that provides more than just the mention of the weather as a background. The reference refers to a state of weather that has physical (cold rain, sudden hail, frost,...) or psychological (overcast sky, storm warning, sultry afternoon...) effects. These effects are mainly felt through the skin (contact, temperature,...); which connects the author/reader to the World (his direct environment).

The mentioned weather and its effects share a set of semes (brutality, unpredictability, "cold", psychologically oppressive climate,...) with the situation experienced by the author.

A sudden and unpleasant change of situation shares semes (brutality, unpredictability, impact) with a sudden storm, hail, cold rain. A hard time to live, a disappointment, with a cold rain. An overcast weather before the rain shares with a moment when we fear the occurrence of events that we fear.

Although the meteo is often used as a marker (kigo - word of season), it sometimes brings more than just the place in the season or the context of the moment.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* poesie - Use of poetical devices.
Use of poetical devices.

* absence - The main element is not explicit.
The haiku is structured around an unnamed element to which each image refers. The interest is to save the space that would be used by naming the element while having the effect it produces.

The haiku can appear as a vault from which the scaffolding has been removed. If the haiku is well composed, the main element is absent but everything refers to it.

This technique delays storage in memory because the reader must complete the discourse with the unnamed element so that the haiku is unambiguously understandable. It then acquires a higher memory weight.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Abri - The shelter, the refuge, the greenhouse, the home.

Tout endroit de vie où on est abrité des conditions extérieures. La maison, la serre... En relation avec les dialectiques intérieur versus Extérieur, Chaud versus Froid. Souvent lié aux haïkus météo.

A distinguer du lieu Clos qui possède moins de sèmes. Au chaud dans une maison alors qu'il pleut dehors relève de l'Abri plus que lieu Clos.

* D_IntExt - In <> Out.

* D_ChaudFroid - Warm <> Cold.

* T_Immobile - Frozen Time.

* - Frozen Time.

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