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Analysis of the Haiku structure

the beggar
counting coins . . .
first stars

le mendiant
comptant ses pièces . . .
premières étoiles


Bill Kenney, USA
cco 2017-11-1

Commentaire.

Un lien que j'appelle magique active ce haïku. La liaison entre des pièces menues et les étoiles au travers de la brillance crée une atmosphère spéciale. C'est ce que je définis comme un haïku "cosmique", ce qui veut dire qu'il nous met directement en relation avec l'immensité du Monde. Ce mendiant a des allures de clochard céleste...

Keywords

poverty urban star light

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* opp-sim - Opposition-similarity.
Opposition AND similarity. A relationship between two terms is both an opposition and a similarity.

For example: an egg on the plate and the setting sun. There is a sharing of the semes of roundness, red, but opposition between Up versus Bottom, Large versus Small.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* xxx - Undefined appeal.
Haïku having something undefinable that deserves further study.

* S21 - Caesura between L2 and L3.
Caesura between L2 and L3.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Lumiere - The Light.

La Lumière.
A mettre en relation avec la Lumière dans la Nuit.

* D_HautBas - Up <> Down.

Une opposition entre ce qui est en Haut et ce qui est en Bas. Par exemple, le ciel et la terre, les étoiles et les lumières de la ville, les nuages et la mer...

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