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Analysis of the Haiku structure

"tumeur maligne..."
dans les deux poings du fermier
des mauvaises herbes


Vincent Hoarau, France
cco 2017-11-2

Commentaire.

Haïku basé sur deux discours superposés. Celui de surface, factuel, composé de deux parties reliées par les similitudes entre herbes et metastases, entre deux choses perçues comme non désirées et hors de contrôle. Le fermier, habitué à contrôler sa terre, voit sa vie lui échapper au travers de cette chose qui s'étend surnoisement. Les herbes qu'il tient dans ses poings, c'est sa révolte contre ce qu'il ne peut maîtriser. Ce sont les archétypes du Sauvage, de la Mort qui sont à l'oeuvre. Un haïku qui lie le monde interne (le Moi) au monde physique (le Monde) par cette image sauvage.

Keywords

illness cancer

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

Translated with www.DeepL.com/Translator

* trans_S - Transition in the surface discourse.
Surface transition.

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

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