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the odds of his
dying before me...
snow mixes with rain

les chances qu'il
meure avant moi...
la neige se mêlée de pluie


Polona Oblak, Slovenia
cco 2017-12-1

Haïku tanka avec une structure inversée. D'abord les sentiments de l'auteure, puis l'élément externe, factuel. C'est aussi un haïku meteo car l'auteure convoque l'atmosphère (au sens propre) externe pour faire résonnance avec son propos.

Keywords

death cold snow rain

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* avis - Opinion given by the author.
The author tells his/her views or an explanation. The speech is not neutral at the first level of reading/writing. This is not a haiku where the author explains to the reader what he or she should understand, usually completed and of no interest. Here, the author gives an indication that is part of the elements of the discourse in addition to the others and that is not a redundancy (redundancy, precision, explanation).

* auteur - Presence of the author.
Presence of the author in the haiku, the author stages himself but does not necessarily speak about him.

* meteo - Meteo used to create an atmosphere.
Use in a haiku segment of a reference to the weather (weather conditions) that provides more than just the mention of the weather as a background. The reference refers to a state of weather that has physical (cold rain, sudden hail, frost,...) or psychological (overcast sky, storm warning, sultry afternoon...) effects. These effects are mainly felt through the skin (contact, temperature,...); which connects the author/reader to the World (his direct environment).

The mentioned weather and its effects share a set of semes (brutality, unpredictability, "cold", psychologically oppressive climate,...) with the situation experienced by the author.

A sudden and unpleasant change of situation shares semes (brutality, unpredictability, impact) with a sudden storm, hail, cold rain. A hard time to live, a disappointment, with a cold rain. An overcast weather before the rain shares with a moment when we fear the occurrence of events that we fear.

Although the meteo is often used as a marker (kigo - word of season), it sometimes brings more than just the place in the season or the context of the moment.

* tanka - Tanka-like haiku.
Tanka is composed of two segments. The first, objective, describes a situation, the second, subjective, allows the author's feelings to speak. It is possible to use this structure in haiku.

The second segment can, however, be written without the author explicitly talking about himself but simply placing elements of his/her behaviour in it.

* S21 - Caesura between L2 and L3.
Caesura between L2 and L3.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Mort - Death.

Contexte de mort (deuil, décès, cimetière...) ou pulsion de mort (guerre, violence...).

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