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heavy snow
the smell of hot soup
under a neon cross

neige épaisse
l'odeur de la soupe chaude
sous une croix de neons


Joe McKeon, USA
cco 2017-12-1

Commentaire.

Haïku social, engagé. Voici un haïku réussi, car le message n'est pas dit explicitement. L'auteur a simplement posé les éléments minimaux nécessaires. Ceci crée un discours très ouvert, gage de succès par la résonance en nous et donc la force de l'image. On peut dire que pour faire passer un message, il est plus efficace de ne pas le dire explicitement. C'est aussi économiqu, au vu du manque de place dans ce petit objet qu'est le haïku.

Keywords

snow poverty soap light social hot warmth smell

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma : sss024 Cold weather and hot food.
  Motif : mmm003 - Cold weather / hot food

Used techniques :


* absence -


Effects: -


At the level: -


Description level: -


* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

Effects: liasen - Binding with sensorial feelings.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content


* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 6-inf - Active infrastructure (archetypes, dialectics)


* allusion - Allusion to something known by the reader.
This technique refers to something that is supposed to be known to the reader. This type of haiku only works for the reader who understands the allusion. It is often a cultural element or an environment shared between the author and the reader. The reference adds a note of complicity in the speech.

ex: Liberty Market: a chain of stores in the USA.

It can also be illustrated in jargon (specialized languages shared by a community).

Effects: resmem - Resonance in memory.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Abri - The shelter, the refuge, the greenhouse, the home, the nest.

Tout endroit de vie où on est abrité des conditions extérieures. La maison, la serre... En relation avec les dialectiques intérieur versus Extérieur, Chaud versus Froid. Souvent lié aux haïkus météo.

A distinguer du lieu Clos qui possède moins de sèmes. Au chaud dans une maison alors qu'il pleut dehors relève de l'Abri plus que lieu Clos.

* D_IntExt - In <> Out.


* D_ChaudFroid - Warm <> Cold.


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