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Analysis of the Haiku structure

premier matin de gel -
un vol d'oies au-dessus
du flot des voitures


Damien Gabriels, France
cco 2017-12-1

Commentaire.

Haïku mû par l'opposition entre notre monde structuré et artificiel et le Monde sauvage. En fait, ici, une opposition-similitude (files, trafic, déplacement). C'est aussi une opposition entre le Haut et le Bas.

Keywords

morning frost bird traffic

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma :
  Motif : mmm092 -

Used techniques :

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* opp-sim - Opposition-similarity.
Opposition AND similarity. A relationship between two terms is both an opposition and a similarity.

For example: an egg on the plate and the setting sun. There is a sharing of the semes of roundness, red, but opposition between Up versus Bottom, Large versus Small.

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