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Analysis of the Haiku structure

crachin d'hiver ~
le crissement métallique
des outils qu'on gratte


Vincent Hoarau, France
cco 2018-01-2

Commentaire.

Voici un haïku à la juxtaposition peu évidente. N’ayant apparemment aucun trait sémantique commun, il semble qu’il s’agisse de deux fragments d’un discours absent pour cause de place. L’auteur a juste posé deux éléments et a laissé le lecteur libre d’imaginer la suite. On peut cependant noter l’opposition entre les deux éléments sur base du bruit. Ce haïku note un temps lent. Le jardinier prépare ses outils pour le printemps. C’est aussi une bulle de Futur dans le Présent. Haïku plus complexe qu’il n’y paraît.

Keywords

drizzle sound winter

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :


* absence -


Effects: -


At the level: -


Description level: -


* multisens - Synestesia - Multi-senses perception.
Haïkus using effects on several senses (hearing, touch, taste, vision, smell). They play on the phenomenon of resonance between feelings (Synesthesia). This device usually produces strong haikus because they are physical.

Effects: liasen - Binding with sensorial feelings.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content


* yugen - Yugen.
Yugen is a concept of Japanese aesthetics that can be expressed as deep, mysterious, dark, troubled.... In criticism of Japanese poetry, he expresses a subtle depth of things that are vaguely evoked in the poem.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)


* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

Effects: liasen - Binding with sensorial feelings.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-suj - Subject, content

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