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Analysis of the Haiku structure

missing you
the cry of the loon
from shore to shore

tu me manques
le cri du huard
d'une rive à l'autre


Earl Keener, USA
cco 2018-02-1

Commentaire.

Schéma fréquent de l’appel lointain mis en relation avec une perte ou un manque. Le lien est renforcé par l’idée de la traversée de l’eau, pouvant figurer une distance infranchissable ou définitive. Voici un haïku, ou plutôt un senryu car l’auteur parle de ses sentiments, avec une structure de tanka (ici inversée) comprenant un élément personnel couplé en écho (similitude) à un élément naturel de même connotation.

Keywords

bird sound couple love loneliness

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma :
  Motif : mmm056 -

Used techniques :

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* soudain - Sudden modification.
The haiku describes a sudden, sometimes unexpected event. He grabs something that just happened. It appears as a transition between two states: before and after.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* auteur - Presence of the author.
Presence of the author in the haiku, the author stages himself but does not necessarily speak about him.

* tanka - Tanka-like haiku.
Tanka is composed of two segments. The first, objective, describes a situation, the second, subjective, allows the author's feelings to speak. It is possible to use this structure in haiku.

The second segment can, however, be written without the author explicitly talking about himself but simply placing elements of his/her behaviour in it.

* yugen - Yugen.
Yugen is a concept of Japanese aesthetics that can be expressed as deep, mysterious, dark, troubled.... In criticism of Japanese poetry, he expresses a subtle depth of things that are vaguely evoked in the poem.

* trans_S - Transition in the surface discourse.
Surface transition.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Cri - The Cry.

Le cri. Un être produit un son bref. Sans relation avec les causes de ce cri. Il peut être en relation avec la douleur, la peur, la violence, l'effort. Ce n'est pas nécessairement un appel pour nous.

Parfois relié à l'Appel.

* A_PlaneEau - Something hovering over the Water.

* A_Separation - Separation, Parting, Farewells.

Le fait de se séparer pour un long moment. De ne plus se revoir avant longtemps. De ne pas savoir si on se reverra. Souvent lié au thème de la Mort. D'ailleurs, ne dit-on pas, partir, c'est mourir un peu.

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