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Analysis of the Haiku structure

open window--
lemon scented tea tree
in the rain

fenêtre ouverte --
l'odeur de citron du théier
dans la pluie

Robyn Cairns, Australia
cco 2018-02-1


Merveilleux haïku sensoriel, mêlant, la vue, l’odeur et l’ouïe. Il y a aussi une surprise, ce n’est pas le thé mais le théier qui sent le citron. Une perturbation très légère de notre lecture qui ajoute du poids mémoriel au discours. Une technique rarement rencontrée.


window rain scent

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* glissement - Shifting from one meaning to another.
Shift of discourse from one meaning to another. It's the whole discourse that changes meaning. Not to be confused with the surprise, which is an unexpected element that does not deeply change the meaning of the discourse.

* multisens - Synestesia - Multi-senses perception.
Haïkus using effects on several senses (hearing, touch, taste, vision, smell). They play on the phenomenon of resonance between feelings (Synesthesia). This device usually produces strong haikus because they are physical.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

Archetypes and dialectics

* D_IntExt - In <> Out.

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