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Analysis of the Haiku structure

prairie winter --
clouds approach
the broken fence

hiver sur la prairie --
les nuages approchent
de la clôture brisée


Paul David Mena, USA
cco 2018-02-2

Commentaire.

Opposition entre l'infini de la prairie et le fini de la clôture. Brisée, elle ne limite plus rien et l'espace appartient au Ciel. On peut aussi y voir du sabi dans la défaite de cette clôture qui a du céder devant le Temps et l'intemporalité des éléments. Opposition aussi entre la Nature infinie, maîtresse des grands espaces et l'éphémère limite posée par les hommes.

Keywords

sky cloud fence prairie USA

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* sabi - Sabi
The sabi is a concept of Japanese aesthetics, derived from Zen Buddhist concepts, linked to the feeling created by the alteration by time, the decrepitude of aging things, the patina of objects, the mark of Time. The charm of things that have lived (Vintage des Américains).

Are sabi: Used steps from an old staircase, worn clothing, a rusty railing, a patinated knob...

In connection with Sabi-wabi.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Japanese_aesthetics

* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

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* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Espace - The Space.

* A_Frontiere - The Frontier, the Boundary between two domains.

* D_HautBas - Up <> Down.

Une opposition entre ce qui est en Haut et ce qui est en Bas. Par exemple, le ciel et la terre, les étoiles et les lumières de la ville, les nuages et la mer...

* D_Nature - Up <> Down.

Une opposition entre ce qui est en Haut et ce qui est en Bas. Par exemple, le ciel et la terre, les étoiles et les lumières de la ville, les nuages et la mer...

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