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Analysis of the Haiku structure

beach stroll
dipping our feet
in the stars

promenade sur la plage
nous trempons nos pieds
dans les étoiles

Debbi Antebi, UK
cco 2018-02-2


Ce haïku est une variante du Ciel dans la flaque. On marche souvent sur le ciel, ou sur la Lune. Ici, l'auteure est sur une plage avec des flaques de mer et marche sur les étoiles. Cette image est prégnante par la situation inversée de la personne qui marche Dans le ciel. C'est la réconciliation d'une opposition Haut versus Bas.


beach sky star puddle

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma : sss018 The Sky on Earth.
  Motif : mmm033 - Walk on the sky.

Schéma : sss018 The Sky on Earth.
  Motif : mmm065 - Moon, stars in the puddle, in the pond.

Used techniques :

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects

At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious

At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 6-inf - Active infrastructure (archetypes, dialectics)

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