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summer thunderstorm
filling air with tension
she crosses her thighs

(orage d'été
remplissant l'air de tension
elle croise ses cuisses)

John Hawkhead, UK
cco 2018-05-1


Il me fait penser à la scène du film Basic Instinct. La réussite de ce haïku repose sur la juxtaposition active d'éléments possèdant des sèmes communs (la tension et le 'juste avant'). Il dit aussi sans dire. Le message est sous-entendu. Il est reconstitué dans l'esprit du lecteur en se basant sur son vécu, ce qui facilite l'assimilation en mémoire et le rend actif. Donc, à retenir : juste poser les bons éléments dans un discours minimaliste et le lecteur fait le reste.


thunderstorm woman erotic

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* juxtaposition - Juxtaposition.
Use of images placed side by side to create an effect superior to that of each separate image. It is not a resonance effect as in similarity but rather a composition effect as in a painting or still life.

As the juxtaposed images have no or very few common semes, they compose a new global image in relation to its components.

* soudain - Sudden modification.
The haiku describes a sudden, sometimes unexpected event. He grabs something that just happened. It appears as a transition between two states: before and after.

* culturel - Use of external cultural reference.
The haiku is based on an external cultural element, well known by the reader. There is a sharing of an environment (place, situation...) or cultural element (music, painting...) that will seek memories or sensations in the memory and experience of the reader. This device saves a lot of space, nothing else is needed, the effect is achieved by the reader's contribution.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

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