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Analysis of the Haiku structure

finding her place
between black and white
the young eagle

cherchant sa place
entre le noir et le blanc
le jeune aigle


Sandi Pray, USA
cco 2018-05-1

Commentaire.

Ce haïku me laisse une impression étrange. Le discours n'est pas exactement celui attendu mais il parle de la place difficile à se faire pour un jeune rapace. Le ciel est en effet divisé en compartiments pour ce type d'oiseaux. L'auteure aborde ce thème par une image. Malgré l'avis de l'auteure, la structure en une phrase, le discours a donné de la force à ce haïku.

Keywords

bird eagle sky

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* avis - Opinion given by the author.
The author tells his/her views or an explanation. The speech is not neutral at the first level of reading/writing. This is not a haiku where the author explains to the reader what he or she should understand, usually completed and of no interest. Here, the author gives an indication that is part of the elements of the discourse in addition to the others and that is not a redundancy (redundancy, precision, explanation).

* psycho - Haiku with a psychological background.
Haiku can have a reading level that expresses an underlying psychological situation that is still active. It is not sure if this analysis is accurate. It can simply exist in the reader's mind. It is almost always absent from the author's intention, as can be seen from the author's request for information.

* dislocation - Dislocation.
Dislocation: repetition of the subject at the end (or at the beginning) of the sentence. The repeated subject is then specified. This delays understanding and insists on the main subject of the speech.

ex: He loses his leaves, the tree.

* xxx - Undefined appeal.
Haïku having something undefinable that deserves further study.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

Translated with www.DeepL.com/Translator

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Rencontre - The Unexpected Encounter.

La rencontre fortuite entre deux êtres avec un moment où quelque chose se passe entre eux.

* A_Passage - The Crossing, the Transition.

Tout ce qui est le passage d'une étape, d'une borne, d'un état à l'autre. Le franchissement d'un col, le passage d'une barrière séparant deux zones. Les ponts, solstices, nouvel-an...

* T_FuturPresent - Bubble of Future.

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