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first spring sun
the naked legs
of a window cleaner

wo einst ihr Grab war
eine Tulpe
dem Licht entgegen

premier soleil de printemps
les jambes nues
du laveur de vitre


Eva Limbach, Germany
cco 2018-05-1

Commentaire.

Belle juxtaposition efficace basée sur des éléments ayant des sèmes communs bien que n'appartenant pas au même ensemble physique. La connotation érotique est présente en allusion, ce qui est augmente la force. A retenir : ne pas dire les choses, juste poser les bons éléments en relation active.

Keywords

sun erotic window

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

Translated with www.DeepL.com/Translator

* auteur - Presence of the author.
Presence of the author in the haiku, the author stages himself but does not necessarily speak about him.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* ellipse - Ellipsis.
Ellipsis: Only the minimum is said but the whole situation can be reconstruct by the reader.
This is also the case when only a part of the discourse is present. The remaining part can be guessed by the reader.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Rencontre - The Unexpected Encounter.

La rencontre fortuite entre deux êtres avec un moment où quelque chose se passe entre eux.

* A_Vie - Life.

Toute manifestation d'un être pour affirmer sa présence, sa survie, parfois dans un contexte qui lui est défavorable.

* T_Cycle - Cyclical Time.

* D_IntExt - In <> Out.

* - In <> Out.

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