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Analysis of the Haiku structure

everything
we have in common...
plum blossom rain

vse kar
nam je skupnega...
dez slivovih cvetov

quelque chose
que nous avons en commun ...
la pluie de fleurs de pruniers


Polona Oblak, Slovenia
cco 2018-05-1

Commentaire.

Les haïkus de Polona Oblak sont toujours un peu particuliers. elle excelle dans le discours indirecte, tout en allusions, finesse. Il s'agit souvent de situations intimes traitées par une approche 'extérieure'. On pourait définir ce discours comme celui d'un haïku meteo mais dans un niveau de discours plus intime. En effet, tout le message passe au travers de la disposition des éléments extérieurs, de l'environnement. Un style à observer.

Keywords

flower blooming tree

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* S21 - Caesura between L2 and L3.
Caesura between L2 and L3.

* avis - Opinion given by the author.
The author tells his/her views or an explanation. The speech is not neutral at the first level of reading/writing. This is not a haiku where the author explains to the reader what he or she should understand, usually completed and of no interest. Here, the author gives an indication that is part of the elements of the discourse in addition to the others and that is not a redundancy (redundancy, precision, explanation).

* auteur - Presence of the author.
Presence of the author in the haiku, the author stages himself but does not necessarily speak about him.

* psycho - Haiku with a psychological background.
Haiku can have a reading level that expresses an underlying psychological situation that is still active. It is not sure if this analysis is accurate. It can simply exist in the reader's mind. It is almost always absent from the author's intention, as can be seen from the author's request for information.

* xxx - Undefined appeal.
Haïku having something undefinable that deserves further study.

* concordance - Accordance between the surface and deep discourses
Accordance between superfical and deep discourses. Two parallel discourses.

* trans_S - Transition in the surface discourse.
Surface transition.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

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