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Analysis of the Haiku structure

pommiers en fleurs-
la vieille balançoire
immobile...


Francine Aubry, France
cco 2018-05-1

Commentaire.

Un autre haïku basé sur la Vie qui triomphe mais avec une structure différente. Ici, c'est un élément extérieur qui porte la Vie et non l'élément principal, la balançoire abandonnée (image de la Chute, de la Déchéance). Cette disposition est originale mais crée un discours efficace reposant sur une opposition.

Keywords

garden flower blooming apple_tree

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma :
  Motif : mmm017 -

Used techniques :

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* sabi - Sabi
The sabi is a concept of Japanese aesthetics, derived from Zen Buddhist concepts, linked to the feeling created by the alteration by time, the decrepitude of aging things, the patina of objects, the mark of Time. The charm of things that have lived (Vintage des Américains).

Are sabi: Used steps from an old staircase, worn clothing, a rusty railing, a patinated knob...

In connection with Sabi-wabi.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Japanese_aesthetics

* - Sabi
The sabi is a concept of Japanese aesthetics, derived from Zen Buddhist concepts, linked to the feeling created by the alteration by time, the decrepitude of aging things, the patina of objects, the mark of Time. The charm of things that have lived (Vintage des Américains).

Are sabi: Used steps from an old staircase, worn clothing, a rusty railing, a patinated knob...

In connection with Sabi-wabi.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Japanese_aesthetics

Archetypes and dialectics

* T_Immobile - Frozen Time.

* T_PassePresent - Bubble of Past.

* A_Vie - Life.

Toute manifestation d'un être pour affirmer sa présence, sa survie, parfois dans un contexte qui lui est défavorable.

* A_Cycle - Cycle of Time.

Le cycle des saisons, des années, des vies. Cela peut être répétitif comme les saisons ou à un seul cycle avec une croissance suivie d'une chute.

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