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Analysis of the Haiku structure

leaving the dust
of the world behind—
summer tea

laissant la poussière
du monde derrière —
thé d'été


Sondra Byrnes, USA
cco 2018-05-1

Commentaire.

Allusion zen à la poussière du monde.

Keywords

zen tea

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* S21 - Caesura between L2 and L3.
Caesura between L2 and L3.

* avis - Opinion given by the author.
The author tells his/her views or an explanation. The speech is not neutral at the first level of reading/writing. This is not a haiku where the author explains to the reader what he or she should understand, usually completed and of no interest. Here, the author gives an indication that is part of the elements of the discourse in addition to the others and that is not a redundancy (redundancy, precision, explanation).

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* culturel - Use of external cultural reference.
The haiku is based on an external cultural element, well known by the reader. There is a sharing of an environment (place, situation...) or cultural element (music, painting...) that will seek memories or sensations in the memory and experience of the reader. This device saves a lot of space, nothing else is needed, the effect is achieved by the reader's contribution.

Archetypes and dialectics

* T_Lent - Slow Time.

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