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matin brumeux~
une rondelle de citron flotte
sur mon thé


Sarra Masmoudi, Tunisie
cco 2018-05-1

Commentaire.

Il existe deux versions de ce haïku. J'ai préféré celle-ci avec le citron plutôt que la rondelle de soleil qui est pour moi trop 'poétique'. Ici, avec le citron, c'est au lecteur à reconstruire le discours, ce qui donne plus d'activité au haïku. J'aime bien ces oppositions Haut versus Bas, Intérieur versus Extérieur, couleur versus grisalille. Ce n'est pas un haïku météo car il ne se sert pas de la meteo pour passer une atmosphère.

Keywords

morning tea humour cup color

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma :
  Motif : mmm003 -

Used techniques :

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* opp-sim - Opposition-similarity.
Opposition AND similarity. A relationship between two terms is both an opposition and a similarity.

For example: an egg on the plate and the setting sun. There is a sharing of the semes of roundness, red, but opposition between Up versus Bottom, Large versus Small.

* auteur - Presence of the author.
Presence of the author in the haiku, the author stages himself but does not necessarily speak about him.

Archetypes and dialectics

* D_IntExt - In <> Out.

* D_HautBas - Up <> Down.

Une opposition entre ce qui est en Haut et ce qui est en Bas. Par exemple, le ciel et la terre, les étoiles et les lumières de la ville, les nuages et la mer...

* T_Immobile - Frozen Time.

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