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Analysis of the Haiku structure

vieux cimetière
sur les restes d'une tombe
pousse la cigüe


Gérard Dumon, France
cco 2018-05-2

Commentaire.

Un haïku noir à première vue. Mais c'est aussi le schémà de la Vie qui triomphe de la Mort. L'image est d'autant plus marquante qu'il s'agit d'une plante vénéneuse mortelle connue dans l'histoire. A remarquer la structure inégale : deux éléments sur la mort et en dessous, tout au bout de la ligne, une fleur se dresse comme une surprise et qui retourne le sens du discours. On dirait un domino avec ses deux parties séparées et unies. Belle construction active qui mime le mouvement de la vie dans un effet de zoom assez rare. Il me fait frissonner ce haïku.

Keywords

cemetery grave flower death

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma :
  Motif : mmm070 -

Used techniques :

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* allusion - Allusion to something known by the reader.
This technique refers to something that is supposed to be known to the reader. This type of haiku only works for the reader who understands the allusion. It is often a cultural element or an environment shared between the author and the reader. The reference adds a note of complicity in the speech.

ex: Liberty Market: a chain of stores in the USA.

It can also be illustrated in jargon (specialized languages shared by a community).

* culturel - Use of external cultural reference.
The haiku is based on an external cultural element, well known by the reader. There is a sharing of an environment (place, situation...) or cultural element (music, painting...) that will seek memories or sensations in the memory and experience of the reader. This device saves a lot of space, nothing else is needed, the effect is achieved by the reader's contribution.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

* xxx - Undefined appeal.
Haïku having something undefinable that deserves further study.

* yugen - Yugen.
Yugen is a concept of Japanese aesthetics that can be expressed as deep, mysterious, dark, troubled.... In criticism of Japanese poetry, he expresses a subtle depth of things that are vaguely evoked in the poem.

* zoom - Zoom of the discourse.
The three segments of haiku are organized with images that are closer and closer as a zoom effect.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Mort - Death.

Contexte de mort (deuil, décès, cimetière...) ou pulsion de mort (guerre, violence...).

* D_VieMort - Life <> Death.

* T_Lent - Slow Time.

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