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zazen my fuzzy shadow on the wall

zazen mon ombre floue sur le mur


Sondra Byrnes, USA
cco 2018-05-2

Commentaire.

Rare haïku en une ligne malgré une structure en trois éléments. Il respecte l'écriture en japonais où le lecteur voit les coupes, chose qui ne nous est pas habituelle dans nos langues plus structurées et ponctuées. Un petit délice que ce discours flottant.

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zazen shadow wall

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :


* culturel - Use of external cultural reference.
The haiku is based on an external cultural element, well known by the reader. There is a sharing of an environment (place, situation...) or cultural element (music, painting...) that will seek memories or sensations in the memory and experience of the reader. This device saves a lot of space, nothing else is needed, the effect is achieved by the reader's contribution.

Effects: liavec - Binding to the reader's experience.


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)


* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

Effects: liadyn - Binding with dynamics effects


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)


* auteur - Presence of the author.
Presence of the author in the haiku, the author stages himself but does not necessarily speak about him.

Effects: liavec - Binding to the reader's experience.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 3-aut - Author's role


* S3 - Three elements haiku.
Three independent elements compose the haiku. Also known as the grocery list.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* L1 - One line haiku.
One line haiku. This arrangement, which is similar to Japanese haiku, leaves the reader to grasp where the breaks are. The elements follow one another but constitute several blocks that the mind cuts out by images.

Effects: decod - Decoding the structure.
Affects the time required to understand the speech by the time required to decode the structure. Groups the elements by physical and temporal caesuras.

At the level: 0-form - Formal level
Formal appearance, written forms.

Description level: 1-pres - Formal representation

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