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Analysis of the Haiku structure

breakup —
my daughter's voice cracks
across two continents

séparation —
les craquements de la voix de ma fille
entre deux continents


Roberta Beary, Ireland
cco 2018-05-2

Commentaire.

Haïku basé sur des similitudes, craquements techniques, séparation, distance... La voix au loin est aussi un motif marquant, renforcé ici par la mention des deux continents et donc de l'ocean. Il me fait penser à ce vers "Thousand milles of rain between us".

Keywords

child sound telephone

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma :
  Motif : mmm037 -

Used techniques :

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* auteur - Presence of the author.
Presence of the author in the haiku, the author stages himself but does not necessarily speak about him.

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