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grand ciel sans fin~
le nichoir vide


Sarra Masmoudi, Tunisie
cco 2018-06-1

Commentaire.

Opposition entre Haut versus Bas, Grand versus Petit. La force de ce haïku me semble être plutôt dans le non-dit. Pourquoi ce nid est-il vide ? Les réponses sont multiples. Cela va de la mort de l'oiseau qui l'occupait, du non-retour ou du retard du migrateur (porteur des sèmes du Voyage, de la Perte, de la Mort), à l'Absence d'un être familier. Les oppositions, la richesse sémantique et l'incertitude d'interprétation font la puissance de ce petit discours construit sur une simple juxtaposition.

Keywords

sky bird death

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* avis - Opinion given by the author.
The author tells his/her views or an explanation. The speech is not neutral at the first level of reading/writing. This is not a haiku where the author explains to the reader what he or she should understand, usually completed and of no interest. Here, the author gives an indication that is part of the elements of the discourse in addition to the others and that is not a redundancy (redundancy, precision, explanation).

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* yugen - Yugen.
Yugen is a concept of Japanese aesthetics that can be expressed as deep, mysterious, dark, troubled.... In criticism of Japanese poetry, he expresses a subtle depth of things that are vaguely evoked in the poem.

* absence - The main element is not explicit.
The haiku is structured around an unnamed element to which each image refers. The interest is to save the space that would be used by naming the element while having the effect it produces.

The haiku can appear as a vault from which the scaffolding has been removed. If the haiku is well composed, the main element is absent but everything refers to it.

This technique delays storage in memory because the reader must complete the discourse with the unnamed element so that the haiku is unambiguously understandable. It then acquires a higher memory weight.

* ellipse - Ellipsis.
Ellipsis: Only the minimum is said but the whole situation can be reconstruct by the reader.
This is also the case when only a part of the discourse is present. The remaining part can be guessed by the reader.

* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

* L2 - Two lines haikus.
Two lines haiku.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Mort - Death.

Contexte de mort (deuil, décès, cimetière...) ou pulsion de mort (guerre, violence...).

* A_Espace - The Space.

* A_Ciel - The Sky.

Le Ciel. L'immensité de ce qui est au-dessus de nous. Sans connotation religieuse.

Souvent lié aux dialectiques D_HautBas et D_GrandPetit.

* A_Voyage - The Travel.

Le voyage, la migration... Lié à la Route qui elle est plus en potentialités que le Voyage qui est action.

* D_HautBas - Up <> Down.

Une opposition entre ce qui est en Haut et ce qui est en Bas. Par exemple, le ciel et la terre, les étoiles et les lumières de la ville, les nuages et la mer...

* D_GrandPetit - Big <> Little.

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