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Analysis of the Haiku structure

french kissing
on the bridge with love locks
two pink-haired girls

French kiss
sur le pont avec des cadenas d'amour
deux filles aux cheveux roses


Liu Chen-ou, Canada
cco 2018-06-1

Commentaire.

Haïku intéressant. Sa construction en juxtaposition d'éléments inattendus, la surprise à la fin, les sèmes du pont qui relient, des cadenas qui scellent lui donne sa force. Mais c'est surtout pour moi la fin avec le point de couleur vive qui le fait résonner longtemps.

Keywords

kiss woman bridge color pink couple

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* juxtaposition - Juxtaposition.
Use of images placed side by side to create an effect superior to that of each separate image. It is not a resonance effect as in similarity but rather a composition effect as in a painting or still life.

As the juxtaposed images have no or very few common semes, they compose a new global image in relation to its components.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* surprise - Unexpected element.
An element of haiku is unexpected. In view of the speech, we would have thought of one element and it is another that creates a surprise effect.

* fin - Final element give the clue.
A detail at the end reveals the real meaning of haiku.

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* S21 - Caesura between L2 and L3.
Caesura between L2 and L3.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Passage - The Crossing, the Transition.

Tout ce qui est le passage d'une étape, d'une borne, d'un état à l'autre. Le franchissement d'un col, le passage d'une barrière séparant deux zones. Les ponts, solstices, nouvel-an...

* A_PointActif - Active point (color, sound, ...)

Variante de la Couleur. Ici, c'est un point, généralement de couleur qui a le rôle important. En fait, cet archétype illustre le fait que c'est l'Inconscient qui analyse les images de notre regard. C'est lui qui repère ces points et y dirige notre regard.

* T_Immobile - Frozen Time.

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