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long blue tail
of a damselfly
kite festival

la longue queue bleue
de la demoiselle
festival de cerf-volants


Marilyn Fleming, USA
cco 2018-06-2

Commentaire.

Difficulté de la traduction. La demoiselle est une petite libellule bleue (Zygoptères, agrion). L'auteure joue sur la similitude des formes. A remarquer que le moteur du haïku en L3 n'est pas une simple explication mais seulement un des deux éléments de la mise en rapport. Cette technique ne clôt pas le discours comme une explication au lecteur mais, au contraire, l'ouvre en laissant le lecteur reconstruire la scène.

Keywords

insect dragonfly kite color blue

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* S21 - Caesura between L2 and L3.
Caesura between L2 and L3.

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* opp-sim - Opposition-similarity.
Opposition AND similarity. A relationship between two terms is both an opposition and a similarity.

For example: an egg on the plate and the setting sun. There is a sharing of the semes of roundness, red, but opposition between Up versus Bottom, Large versus Small.

* jeu_mots - Puns.
A pun, a double meaning word without being a pivot. This is often an occasion for a multi-level reading discourse with double meaning words. This device is linked to humour, to the comic of the situation.

Archetypes and dialectics

* D_GrandPetit - Big <> Little.

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