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Analysis of the Haiku structure

fading bruises
birdsong
in the distance

les coups s'estompent
un chant d'oiseau
dans le lointain


An Mayou, USA
cco 2018-07-1

Commentaire.

L'auteure excelle dans cette écriture où elle juxtapose le minimum d'éléments pour nous dire des situations dures. La force du haïku naît de la situation, de l'importance du non-dit, du minimalisme qui nous oblige à reconstruire le discours.

Keywords

birdsong

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma : sss031 The call, the scream. Something's draw attention without being visible.
  Motif : mmm056 - The call of the bird.

Schéma : sss040 Me and the World.
  Motif : mmm079 - Me and the World.

Used techniques :


* ellipse - Ellipsis.
Ellipsis: Only the minimum is said but the whole situation can be reconstruct by the reader.
This is also the case when only a part of the discourse is present. The remaining part can be guessed by the reader.

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-strs - Organization, surface structures


* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

Translated with www.DeepL.com/Translator

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-trait - Style,subject handling


* dur - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

Translated with www.DeepL.com/Translator

Effects: reinter - Reworking at the end.


At the level: 1-surf - Surface level
Discourse, surface structures, content, subject, style.

Description level: 2-trait - Style,subject handling


* xxx - Undefined appeal.
Haïku having something undefinable that deserves further study.

Effects: liainc - Binding to the Unconscious


At the level: 2-prof - Deep level
Deep and non explicit structures, active objects of the unconscious.

Description level: 5-strp - Deep structure (schemas, patterns, cultural, associations, similarities)

Archetypes and dialectics

* D_MoiMonde - I versus the World

Mention d'un être qui se dstincte par rapport au reste du Monde.

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