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Analysis of the Haiku structure

Pieds dans le lac ~
Autour de mes chevilles
quelques nuages

Pascale Dehoux, France
cco 2018-07-2

Haïku basé sur le schéma du ciel en bas, celui de l'inversion du monde, opposition Haut versus Bas. On peut aussi y trouver l'idée de la marche dans le ciel.


lake sky cloud

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma : sss018 The Sky on Earth.
  Motif : mmm034 - The sky in the puddle.

Used techniques :

* opposition - Images in opposition.
Images with a group of opposite senses. The images are in opposition to each other. However, the opposite semes are grouped into dialectics. A dialectic is composed of opposite semes, like the two sides, poles of the same grade.

For example:
- Top and Bottom.
- Inside and Outside
- Big and Tiny

* auteur - Presence of the author.
Presence of the author in the haiku, the author stages himself but does not necessarily speak about him.

* avis - Opinion given by the author.
The author tells his/her views or an explanation. The speech is not neutral at the first level of reading/writing. This is not a haiku where the author explains to the reader what he or she should understand, usually completed and of no interest. Here, the author gives an indication that is part of the elements of the discourse in addition to the others and that is not a redundancy (redundancy, precision, explanation).

Archetypes and dialectics

* D_HautBas - Up <> Down.

Une opposition entre ce qui est en Haut et ce qui est en Bas. Par exemple, le ciel et la terre, les étoiles et les lumières de la ville, les nuages et la mer...

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