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Analysis of the Haiku structure

midnight . . .
scent of the incense stick
burning itself

minuit . . .
l'odeur de bâtonnet d'encens
se consumant


Nicholas David Klacsanzky , Ukraine
cco 2018-08-1

Commentaire.

Un haïku de fin de vie. L'odeur ajoute une dimension supplémentaire à la scène. L'encens signale une ouverture transcendante. Le moment, minuit, est celui du Passage entre deux jours, peut-être aussi le Passage vers quelque chose d'autre, qui n'est pas nommé, nommable. En posant quelques indices seulement, ce haïku possède une ouverture très large. Indéfini, il offre au lecteur un espace de rêverie.

Keywords

midnight night smell

Structure of this haiku.

Used techniques :

* yugen - Yugen.
Yugen is a concept of Japanese aesthetics that can be expressed as deep, mysterious, dark, troubled.... In criticism of Japanese poetry, he expresses a subtle depth of things that are vaguely evoked in the poem.

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

* feuilleté - Multilevel discourse, layered haiku.
Haikus with two (or more) reading levels. A first objective level referring to a situation, another underlying level saying something else. The Chinese are fond of this type of discourse with many levels.

These various levels may be conscious or unconscious.

We find a little bit of this technique consciously applied in the weather haiku. The weather element can be understood as an mention to the weather and as the element that creates the atmosphere of haiku.

The two levels of discourse are conscious and disjointed and well visible in haiku tanka, of which they form the two parts. However, they overlap in the layered haiku.

Translated with www.DeepL.com/Translator

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Passage - The Crossing, the Transition.

Tout ce qui est le passage d'une étape, d'une borne, d'un état à l'autre. Le franchissement d'un col, le passage d'une barrière séparant deux zones. Les ponts, solstices, nouvel-an...

* A_Nuit - The Night.

La nuit primale, avec son obscurité, ses "dangers", ses mystères et nos peurs millénaires.

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