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house clearance
room by room by room
my mother disappears

vidage de maison
pièce après pièce après pièce
ma mère disparait


Alan Summers, England
cco 2018-09-2

Commentaire.

L'explication donnée par l'auteur en L3 ne gâche pas le discours de ce haïku; au contraire, elle lui donne de l'ouverture de la résonance. Tout le monde a du vivre cette situation, et donc s'approprie le discours en le complétant, dans la phase de liage en mémoire, avec son propre vécu. Mais le trait particulier de ce haïku est en L2, une matérialisation du Temps, du processus de vidage de la maison. L2 illustre le cheminement, lourd et pénible, marqué dans le texte par la répétition. Un effet rare, à bien étudier.

Keywords

home mother family death silence

Structure of this haiku.

Schema and motifs :

Schéma :
  Motif : mmm013 -

Used techniques :

* simili - Similitudes.
Use of images with common semes. The sharing of common semes (qualities, characteristics) makes images reinforce each other. There is resonance because the mind makes the relationship between the two images.

A cup of tea and a lake share the fact that they are an expanse of liquid surrounded by a rim. We can "see" the image of one in the other.

* atmosphere - Atmosphere.
Something emerges from all the elements that constitute haiku: a climate, an atmosphere. The author does not state this explicitly. It is the reader who reconstructs it from his or her own experience.

This is especially true in three-segment haiku, also called "grocery list". But this effect can also be achieved in other ways.

The mention of feelings related to the weather and taste adds a multisensory dimension to the atmosphere created.

* avis - Opinion given by the author.
The author tells his/her views or an explanation. The speech is not neutral at the first level of reading/writing. This is not a haiku where the author explains to the reader what he or she should understand, usually completed and of no interest. Here, the author gives an indication that is part of the elements of the discourse in addition to the others and that is not a redundancy (redundancy, precision, explanation).

* archetype - Active archetypes.
Active presence of archetypes that have determined relationships between images. These archetypes are structures that have aggregated seeds (meanings) and are patterns inherited from the collective unconscious. These are the models that we use to organize our perception of the World.

Archetypes and dialectics

* A_Ame - The Soul of things.

* A_Chute - The Fall,the Decline,to die,to grow old.

Tout ce qui est considéré comme une diminution de l'état, une perte de niveau, généralement suite au cours du Temps. Le déclin des êtres ou des choses.

Instanciations
- La maison abandonnée, la vieillesse, la maladie.
- L'approche de la mort, de la fin.
- La dégradation des lieux, des objets.
- Le déclin.
- Parfois toute situation sabi portant la trace des années sur un objet.

Type : Etat

Structure : Sujet + Verbe + Etat

Sujet := Toute chose
Verbe := être / devenir
Etat := abandonné / inutile / dégradé /diminué

* A_Mort - Death.

Contexte de mort (deuil, décès, cimetière...) ou pulsion de mort (guerre, violence...).

* T_Lent - Slow Time.

* T_PAssePresent - Bubble of Past.

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